chapters four AND five

CHAPTER FOUR — Writing in Pictures: Imagery, Emotion, and Surprise

If Chapter Three was about the bones of a song, Chapter Four is where we slap skin, hair, teeth, and a questionable hat on it. This is where you stop describing and start showing. Where you ditch the abstract fog and pull listeners right into the room with you.

People don’t remember philosophies.
They remember the taste of the coffee, the wet shoes, the flickering neon sign that promised nothing good.

Songs live or die on pictures. Continue reading

Rhyme without pain

Chapter 3 — Rhyme Without Pain: Making Your Rhymes Serve the Song

(Expanded, spiced up, and ready for the dance floor)

Rhyme should feel like butter melting on hot toast — smooth, inevitable, pleasing, and maybe just a little sinful.
But too many writers treat rhyme like jury duty: mandatory, confusing, and avoided whenever possible. Continue reading

Write a Song, Chapter Two

Chapter 2:

Words That Sing: Choosing Language That Fits the Music
(The Surrealist, Gonzo, Universe-Bending Truth about Music)

Words are not “things” you choose.
They’re wild animals hiding in the bushes of your brain, waiting for you to step too close so they can leap out and bite your ankle. The entire craft of songwriting is basically learning to coax these feral creatures into the rhythm without getting personally mauled. Continue reading

Unlawful Orders???

When I was a sergeant, Fort Ord, California, 1962, Best Marching Unit.

There are six congresspeople who tried to tell military about unlawful orders, and they’re now in a whole lot of trouble. I’m at the lower right in the photo, and none of those pictured here would follow an unlawful command, not one of them.

I Ain’t Doin’ That, Sir

(comic folk-protest, acoustic guitar + harmonica, spoken asides encouraged)

[Verse 1]
The captain barked an order with his hat on tight,
Said, “Do this thing immediately—don’t you question why.”
I looked at him sideways, said, “Sir, don’t take it hard,
But that command’s so crooked it needs a bodyguard.” Continue reading

Charge Your God Particle

Strong and dependable, the /Godd Particle Amulet is also sleek and modern.

THE BARDO AMULET GAME

Why This Little USB Amulet Might Be the Most Unusual Thing You’ll Ever Wear

Most people think a video game is something you play and then walk away from and forget about. A whole world inside a wearable amulet.

But what if the game didn’t stay inside the computer?
What if the game followed you around?
What if the more you played it, the stronger the already powerful amulet on your chest became? No skills necessary, the game unfolds as you wander through the afterlife worlds.

That’s what I’ve built for you to train yourself for your next Bardo journey. Continue reading

I Won’t Understand It…

David Teniers Smoker in a Tavern Oil on canvas, original 1650s frame — P.O.R.

Listening When You Don’t Know the Language

Most people shut down the second they hear a language they don’t know.

Instant mental click: “Oh, that’s foreign — I won’t understand it.”
And boom, they’re gone. No attention, no engagement, no participation. Continue reading

Communication Lines Explored

It occurs to me tonight that we have several forms of communication with our circle. We have zoom, second life, quake, quake fortress, fortress classic, team fortress 2, diablo 2r, and of course, email, letterbox and phone — along with a few other lines. I think we’re about to lose one or more of those through government takedown, business failure or old programs that no longer work, and we’d better be prepared for that — this is not the most stable administration we’ve ever endured.

Here’s how it looks from my high perch: Continue reading